先舊後新 (Old Before New)

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先舊後新 (Old Before New)風格與清晰

每句話都清楚,整段卻讀不懂——因為「句子清楚」和「句子接得起來」是兩件事。銜接的關鍵只有一條:句首放已知,句尾放未知。

🧠 Core Ideas

TIP

Williams 的先舊後新原則:在每句開頭放讀者已知的舊資訊,在結尾放尚未知的新資訊。 這樣每句的開頭都回指前一句的結尾,讀者像接力一樣被一路帶著走。

⚖️ Case Study

前 — 新資訊卡在句首,接不起來

Some astonishing differences between the brains of men and women have been discovered by recent research. The corpus callosum, a thick bundle of nerves…

第二句用一個全新名詞開頭,和第一句的結尾接不上,讀者要自己找橋。

後 — 舊資訊在前、新資訊在後

Recent research has discovered some astonishing differences between the brains of men and women. One difference is in the corpus callosum…

「One difference」回指前句結尾的 differences,接力棒順順交出去。

WARNING

小心假銜接:用 however、therefore、in addition 讓句子「看起來」相連,但主題仍在跳,讀者照樣迷路。過渡詞能輔助銜接,不能取代結構——先修好先舊後新的順序,再考慮加過渡詞。與其堆連接詞,不如先刪去贅字、把角色放回主詞

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